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A dog's world - Chapter 11 - The End

Lilo

I was at the store picking out some stuff, when I heard some police cars go by. Nothing rarely ever happens in my neighborhood, so everyone rushed outside to see what had happened. All I could gather from what people were talking was that a dog was involved.

Oh dear. Warning bells went off in my head. Could it be my dog? I had safely locked him in. Oh my god, maybe he’s injured or something. Worry gnawed at me and I practically ran back home.

The house was locked and everything was quiet. I heaved a silent sigh of relief and opened the door.

My jaw dropped. EVERYTHING! And I mean EVERYTHING was in a mess.

“Brownie!” I screamed! Enough was enough. That dog had to be taught that this is just not done. I looked around, there was no sign of Brownie. I entered my room and gasped. All my stuff was all over the floor and the window was broken. What had my crazy dog been doing!!

I was livid with anger.

Brownie?!!” I looked under the bed, in the bathroom everywhere.

Brownie was nowhere to be found. I waited for a while and still there was no sign of Brownie. Then, I began to get worried. Where had he gone? Had he run away? Did he think was going to be too mad at him?

 I know I was too strict with him. He was always to careless! Always breaking things. But he just couldn’t help it, sometimes he just had to act nutty. Without him, the house seemed empty.

Gosh, I had never realized how alone I really was. I had to find him. He had to be ok right? I mean why would anyone want to harm Brownie!! Brownie wouldn’t hurt a fly!

I picked up my flashlight and stepped outside. I heard a police car closing in. And then I heard him.. Where was he? I couldn’t see him. Then suddenly, Brownie’s head popped out of the police car.

He jumped out of the window and came running towards me. I was so mad!! And so relieved that he was ok!! “Bad dog! Bad dog Brownie!! Running away from home!! You should be ashamed!” I pet him to let him know it was ok, and I still loved him.

After that, it was time to face the cops.

“What did he do?” I asked them, expecting the worst.

“That’s a very brave dog you have there”

“What?” what in the world was he talking about?

“Yeah, he chased the robber and cornered him in an alley and barked as loudly as possible to let us know where he was.”

“Ummmm.. I’m sorry I don’t understand.” I really didn’t know what he was talking about.

“There was a robbery.” On seeing my confused face, he continued.. “in your house?”

Oh! So that was it, it wasn’t Brownie! It was the robber. Wait a minute, my house was robbed??

“Did he steal anything?” In my anger, I had failed to notice whether anything was missing.

“Oh yes, but I think we managed to get everything back, thanks to your dog.”

And then he recounted how Brownie had saved the day.

The cops left after a while, promising to come the next morning, to finish off some paper work, so that I could get my stuff back. The crowd had thinned too. All of Brownie’s admirer’s had followed him back to his house and they started leaving only after the cops left.

I walked towards Brownie, I knew he deserved a special treat. All these years I doubted his ferocity but when the time came, he showed his true colors. I sat down next to him and started scratching his neck. Suddenly, he realized I wasn’t mad at him and his tail started to wag to and fro as rapidly as possible.

“ You crazy dog.. ” I muttered softly..

We sat there under the moonlight for a long time, dog and mistress. Finally when I fell asleep on the porch, Brownie licked my hand and woke me up. We went inside. I tried not to look at the mess inside.

I thought I wouldn’t have been able to sleep in that room. I slipped into the bed and I could hear some chewing sound. It was possible that Brownie was chewing my favorite footwear, but it didn’t matter.. Because tonight, with Brownie around, I felt safe.

Brownie

I’m pretty sure something is wrong with Lilo. I am sitting next to her bed, chewing her slippers and all she does is put out her hand and touch me as though to make sure I’m there and then goes back to sleep. I don’t care really. Because no matter how strange she behaves or how mad she gets, with Lilo around, I feel loved. 

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A dog's world - Chapter 10 - The HERO

Brownie

It was so much quieter now that the girls had gone. I stifled a yawn and settled down in my favorite place, right next to kitchen door. Do I really have to explain why this is my favorite place?

Lilo was going to the stores to pick up some supplies. We used to go together earlier, but I’m not allowed to go in there anymore. It wasn’t my fault really! They got some new kind of dog food there some time back and Lilo just wouldn’t buy the pack for me. So I picked it up with my teeth and tried to drag it off the shelf. Of course, I dragged a whole lot of other things along with it and since that day, Lilo doesn’t take me to any supermarkets.

I thought of taking a nap and I had almost dozed off when a heard a soft scraping noise. I got up, Lilo was gone, so who could it be. It seemed to be coming from the bedroom window. I walked softly to the bedroom. Somebody was trying to get in through the window. Why didn’t he just use the door? Were we playing hide and seek? Maybe Lilo was hiding in her usual hiding place and this guy, her friend was looking for her. I had never seen him before though and he smelt pretty bad. Hmmm.. Nevertheless, Lilo’s friends are my friends and I decided to play along.

Her friend was creeping around and looking through her stuff. I tiptoed behind him and barked.

The reaction was incredible! The man screamed for some five ten minutes and then started running towards the window. He stumbled a lot and the room was in a mess before he reached the window.  

I ran to the man barking loudly, “play with me” is what I wanted to tell him. I don’t think he understood. He kept running away.. Finally , he smashed Lilo’s window and jumped out.

“Hey come back!!” I looked around the room. Lilo was going to kill me. I took a quick decision. Lilo’s friend ought to face Lilo after the mess he had made in her room. I jumped out the window and ran behind the man.

The closer I got, the louder the man started to scream. Finally he ran into a corner and stopped, dropped all the stuff he had borrowed from Lilo’s house and started telling me to go away.

Not without you buddy! I barked at him, trying to make him understand that he needed to clean up Lilo’s room.

Suddenly I heard footsteps. Four-five people were running towards us.

“There! There’s the robber!” One man shouted and pointed at Lilo’s friend.

Robber?????????

“And there’s the dog!” he was pointing at me now.

“Good dog!” he bent down and scratched my neck. Aaaaah.. that felt so good.

The cops were there too. They arrested the man and then looked at my collar. “They covered quite a bit of distance, didn’t they?” The cops were talking amongst themselves now. “Lets get him home.. The owner must be worried stiff.”

Yesss!! I was going to travel in a police car!!

We vroomed off and reached home in a while. Lilo was outside frantically pacing up and down.

She saw me and her face lit up and then turned dark.

“Brownie! Bad dog! Running from home!” She sure was mad. Then she saw the cops. And her expression changed.

“What did he do now?” she asked them.

I crept to the door and stood outside waiting for Lilo with my head down. I had been far too lucky the past two days. It was time for a punishment.

“My hero!” Lilo exclaimed. Was she referring to me???

A dog's world - Chapter 9 - THE phone call

Lilo

This could not be happening to me!!

Trisha’s phone was ringing and it was James! There was only one way to end this. Accept it. I’ll just make up some story if he asks why I called. Oh dear God. What had I said in my drunken stupor.

I gathered my wits and answered the phone.

“Hello…” I said tentatively.

“Hi..” James voice was clear and loud.. “Who is this?”

Who is this?? That means whatever happened last night, he didn’t recognize my voice! I didn’t know whether to be happy or sad.

“Ummm.. Shouldn’t you be telling me who you are? Since like, you know, you’ve called me??” This was turning out to be better than I expected.

“No, actually, I’m returning a call I got at night yesterday. I couldn’t answer it because.. Well because I was sleeping.. So, I was just wondering who was  trying to reach me so late at night.”

It was time to have some fun!

“Oh.. About that.. Ummm..” I could see the girls closing in to hear what I was about to say. I continued. “I was calling on behalf of the WRA World’s Refrigerator Association and.. I wanted to know if your refrigerator was running.”

The girls were looking at me as though I had lost it. I could almost imagine the expression on James face.

“I’m sorry. What?” James asked.

“Could you please check?”

“Yeah! My refrigerator is running.” Came back the exasperated reply.

“Well what are you waiting for, go and catch it!!” With that, I hung up and the four of us spent the next five minutes laughing loudly. We were kind of hoping that James would call back and we would clear it out. But he never did. Secretly, I was glad he didn’t.

I mean, how was I supposed to explain my behavior? Anyhow, it was already afternoon and the girls started to pick up their things and leave. This is why I love them so much, because they turn my life around.

I think Brownie too was sad to see them go. He had his tail between his legs when they left and he went to a corner and sat quietly for a long time.

The wild party had come to an end.